Corection d'un texte en anglais


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salut tout le monde,

j'aurais besoin d'aide pour une correction d'un en anglais que je viens

d'écrire, si quelqu'un aurait l'amabilité de m'aider j'en serai gré. merci

je vous remercie d'avance pour votre aide.

Et a charge de revanche

merci pour votre aide même si ce n'est que pour un petit passage.

Voici le texte.

The present crisis is the biggest of the last half century.

But I am optimistic for our future. We must be confident about our system. We

cannot reproach bankers or businessmen for the vices of the selfish society. The

people cannot be hypocrite and proud, they must think about the global problem.

Because sometimes we think just for us we scorn the others.

This crisis is a kind of chance to begin a new era. (I am

not Marxist or anarchist, we just think that it could be worse!!!) We (Americans

only) thought that this economic system was perfect and could do miracles (but

like often/always in the history the Americans have all fault)¿ we have finally

found theirs boarders! Some banks and financial institutes had gone bankrupt and

many people had lost all (in USA above all, the honor is safe).

All days we can see at the T.V. strikes and persons sacked.

A lot of firms are moving theirs production centers to China or India and

making some unemployed. I think we must persevere and reconcile with our

politic system and be tolerant with ours ministers (or dictators). Today we can

observe some changes in "our" world; first: USA had changed for a democrat

black president (yes, in America a black at the power is not common, and they

say that they are the most democratic country¿ are we still in "Civil war" 1861)

against the war and who is trying to find solutions, but to speak the truth I

think that the Americans are always too arrogant and egoistic. One man cannot

change the morals and the customs of a nation who thinks that she is the master

of the world (for the eternity). The USA must know that the world is not a "dollar"

nation, but some countries and different interests. (like life in peace) But

this crisis is a vicious circle that conceals the civil war in Africa and some

others people who are oppressed and killed by the locals systems. (but George

Walker Bush and now Barak say "God bless you") We are crying because we have

lost a lot of Dollars or Euros perhaps more¿. But we don't care about the

people who had never touched money and work his entire life to be a "survivor".

We must be ashamed of immorality and be more pitiful and

generous. I know ¿ we cannot do a perfect world but we can improve oneself. We

must try to build a new society with humility and bravery. Because it will not

be simple, but together we can succeed, not this year, may be not ne next year

but in the future. Cesar had said "Roma was not built in one day" so we must report

these words at the word scale.

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Apres une lecture rapide voila ce que j'ai trouvé:

Americans=>american (je crois que c'est invariable). C'est comme si tu disais the French or the Swiss... tu parles du peuple. Au pire tu mets The american people

All days we can see at the T.V. strikes and persons sacked

Everyday et pas all days

The USA must know that the world is not a "dollar"nation

je pense avoir compris ton idée. j'aurai mis: The USA should know/understand ou must understand.

parce que must know....c'est "doit" dans le sens "obligation" ou forte proba. Donc t'as phrase dit que les "USA savent" en fait. Je sais pas si je suis clair

Some banks and financial institutes had gone bankrupt and

many people had lost all (in USA above all, the honor is safe).

Had lost everything

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