Lettre de motivation

Bonjour par ici,

Je viens vers vous car j'ai du rédigé une lettre de motivation pour un dossier de master. Et l'anglais et moi faisons très mauvais ménage.

Je compte sur les personnes à l'aise avec la langue de Shakespeare pour me dire si ma lettre est rédigé dans un anglais correct et sans trop de fautes.

La voici :

At present in the third year of bi-license history-geography at the university Paris IV, I allow to send you my application file for the 4th year of university " Environment, dynamics of the circles, the risks " which the university proposes under your responsibility.

During my years of study for the preparation of my diploma, I discovered an interest more and more growing for the geography, in more particularly for the physical geography Furthermore, being interested in the current events, the geography is something not to neglect to understand international and geostrategic stakes, and more particularly environmental stakes with the prevention and the risk management as well as the conservation of natural resources making more and more rare.

Indeed, the question of the prevention and the risk management is of an interest growing since the school journey which I made in the bay of Naples and which instigated my curiosity on Vesuvius and the danger which it represents for the neapolitan population, but also on the means implemented to protect effectively the population against the next one awakening of the volcano.

Another question interests me, it is the hydric question. The water is a natural resource which makes more and more rare in certain regions of the world and which it is necessary to manage at best. During my last stay in Corsica, I learnt that there is a project of transport of the water intensify in Sardinia which lacks it. And this question is, in my opinion, a very good object of study because it groups a regional study (the relation of two islands the Mediterranean), the study of the management by Corsica and a possible marketing in Sardinia by the latter. But the context of both islands is not to be neglected to understand the stakes.

My professional project turnsto the domain of the prevention and the risk management by taking into account the interests of the population while taking into account physical constraints which can exist, but also on that of the conservation and the management of natural resources.

I began you to approve, madam, sir, the expression of the distinguished consideration.

Merci pour votre aide et bonne journée. :)

2eme§ AND more particularly

rarer and rarer

3eme§

ARE of an interest

il y a un sujet pluriel

4eme§

rarer and rarer

which is necessary

intensified

in corsica

for the latter (fait référence à marketing in sardinia?)

5§

turns to : je ne pense pas que ça peut s'utiliser pour ce que tu veux dire

pas domain mais field

et perso je trouve que "Another question interests me" c'est clairement du french translated met plutot " I'm (also) interested in an another question which is"

hum le doublon qui avait la meilleur réponse à été supprimé... ou est la logique

C'est probablement le sujet que j'avais signalé comme étant un doublon en oubliant de le préciser sur le topic en question. Cependant, je veux y avoir accès.

Et merci pour tes remarques, je vais faire les modifications.

ouai mais sur l'autre sujet il avait carrément revu les tournures c'était mieux

Je peux avoir accès à ce doublon, ne l'inquiètes pas :)

ah d'accord c'est écrit je veux avoir acces sur ton précédent message, tu voulais écrire je peux

c'est une erreur de frappe de ma part car je suis sur trois fichiers à la fois :p

Bonjour,

Evite les traducteurs automatique, le résultat est vraiment mauvais (je ne te blâme pas car je suis une quiche en allemand mais je me débrouille bien en anglais). Si tu n'as pas encore fait mieux, envoie moi un message et je te corrigerais ta lettre. Je ne veux pas perdre mon temps si tu as déjà trouvé

La seule langue que j'écris correctement est l'italien, Je me débrouille en allemand m

La seule langue que j'écris correctement est l'italien, Je me débrouille en allemand mais écrire un truc en anglais alors que j'en ai pas fait depuis que j'ai quitté le lycée, et cela remonte à loin, c'est problématique.

Voici les dernières modifications de cette lettre :

At present in the third year of bi-license history-geography at the university Paris IV, I allow to send you my application file for the 4th year of university " Environment, dynamics of the circles, the risks " which the university proposes under your responsibility.

During my years of study for the preparation of my diploma, I discovered an interest more and more growing for the geography, in more particularly for the physical geography. This interest for the geography dresses a growing importance to understand better the international and geostrategic stakes. The environmental aspect and more particularly the prevention and the risk management is one of so problematic which draws my attention quite as the management of natural resources.

Indeed, this question of the natural risks represents an interest growing in my approach of the geography since my stay in the bay of Naples. The discovery of Vesuvius allowed me to have a first approach of the notion of risk. The risk which it represents to its next awakening allows to think about the vulnerability of the population with regard to the hazards which he could cause(provoke) on the neapolitan region.

The problem bound to the water is also a part of my interests geographical. Indeed, the water is a natural resource which makes more and more rare. The management of hydric resources is in the center of many questions in certain regions of the world. I was able to studied this question of resource management in water during a stay in Corsica. There is a problem there, the axis of study of which seems to me very interesting, concerning the relation between Corsica and Sardinia as regards a possible marketing of the water Corsica towards the Sardinian island which does not arrange important resources. This could allow a study concerning the regional stakes between two Mediterranean islands at the level of water resources.

I thus show myself particularly interested in the domain of the prevention and the risk management. The consideration of the interests of the populations with regard to environmental requirements, but also the natural question of the risks and the management of natural resources are elements which interest me particularly. I thus plan to continue in this way to arrest better all these problems which seem to be for the centers of many domains.

Peux-tu s'il te plaît poster une version française pour que je me fasse une idée? Merci

Je n'ai pas de version français de cette lettre car j'essaie, autant que possible, de penser dans la langue dans laquelle je dois rédiger.